Hi Falakiko, I'm Paige and as I was going though your blog I saw that you Description for Diwali did quiet make sense, I wanted to help you by editing your description to help you make sure it makes sense. This is your description Hi I am going to be talking about Diwali and me and my buddy was talking about Diwali day and it was amazing as you know that Diwali # represent the light that takes over the dark and that good here are some slide about Diwali.
This is what it should be Hi, Today my buddy and I made a presentation about Diwali, It tells you about what My buddy and I know about Diwali. Diwali is a day were light takes over the dark to let the good show.
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Hi Falakiko,
I'm Paige and as I was going though your blog I saw that you Description for Diwali did quiet make sense, I wanted to help you by editing your description to help you make sure it makes sense.
This is your description Hi I am going to be talking about Diwali and me and my buddy was
talking about Diwali day and it was amazing as you know that Diwali #
represent the light that takes over the dark and that good here are some slide about Diwali.
This is what it should be
Hi, Today my buddy and I made a presentation about Diwali, It tells you about what My buddy and I know about Diwali. Diwali is a day were light takes over the dark to let the good show.
I hope this helps you a little bit.
Paige :)
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